Thanks so much to everyone who commented on my draft blurbs yesterday. I considered the feedback and wrote a new version on the train this morning (and then revised it in my lunch break, so I could post it immediately – there’s that impatience again!). Obviously I couldn’t take everyone’s individual suggestions on board, but I’m keen to hear whether you think the version below is an improvement and what more could potentially be done to really hook the reader.
Although Ceara Wilson and Seb Barkley are strangers, they have a few things in common. They’re both seventeen, due to move from their tiny hometowns to Brisbane for uni and both totally unhappy with the people they’ll be moving in with. For Ceara, it’s two people from high school who hate her. For Seb, it’s a weirdo cousin he hasn’t spoken to for years.
Ceara’s desperate for love, Seb’s desperate to get laid. As they move in a street away from each other and prepare to attend the same university, both think they know the challenges that lie ahead. But when Ceara’s best friend withdraws from her, Seb’s closest mate turns into a wanker and the relentless demands of uni increase their stress levels to the max, they realise that life in the big smoke will test them in ways they’d never imagined.
Before their first semester is over, both Seb and Ceara will be forced to question who they are and what they really want from their lives. Will they have the courage to find the answers, or will they crumble under the pressure?
Let the comments rip! 😀
*Edit: do you think I should tone down the wording (e.g. ‘get laid’ and ‘wanker’) considering it will appear on the back of the book, on Amazon, and on other people’s blogs?*